INT. high school boy's bedroom; a little messy; lots of band posters; rock band instruments; large amplifiers suitable for club performances; four friends tapping on devices...
A cunning piece of fiction. Loved the broken punctuation and other devices in the narration that made me wonder wonder wonder what was at play underneath. Delicious reveal of the narcbot and I adored her moment of unbot-like remorse in her last moments with her "friends." I'm inspired! 💜💜💜
Something about the opening lines felt off so I read it a second time and realized you gave away the store up front: "corroborating Oliver M’s intel and suggesting that the concert should be monitored for illegal activity" followed by "to solidify my role."
A cunning piece of fiction. Loved the broken punctuation and other devices in the narration that made me wonder wonder wonder what was at play underneath. Delicious reveal of the narcbot and I adored her moment of unbot-like remorse in her last moments with her "friends." I'm inspired! 💜💜💜
Thank you Meg! I love your feedback! 🙏🏼
How do I know this wasn’t written by a Narcobot?
Classic teen stuff. Fun story. 🤓
Something about the opening lines felt off so I read it a second time and realized you gave away the store up front: "corroborating Oliver M’s intel and suggesting that the concert should be monitored for illegal activity" followed by "to solidify my role."
Very clever. Awesome piece.